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This is where the script will be discussed, from writing to editing to re-writing!

Neat.

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In the interests in not having too many versions of the script floating about we wont let anyone else see it until you add the 1 or 2 scenes it needs (what we discussed doing is written on the script im sending), then send it back to me and i will edit the new stuff and post the final script on the yahoo mail account for everyone to get a copy.

After that if anyone wants to change anything we can discuss it here.

Okay, please send Your (my script re-written and corrected) script to gyurkomate@vipmail.hu as well, because I don't seem to be able to download attachments over at Yahoo.com. So I haven't read that ScenebyScene.rft thingie yet...

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Sir Humphrey: With Trident we could obliterate the whole of Eastern Europe.
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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

I've been polishing the monk/horse thing a bit. Mind if i post it here?

EM: I believe...
Horse: *sigh* Here he goes again...
EM: ...in harmony and understanding.
Horse: Understanding? And that's coming from YOU, who can't even underst...?
EM: I am, however, having a problem with this valley,
since I belive it, and everything in it, including my horse...
Horse: You leave me out of this, buddy.
eM: ...are a uniform shade of pale pink...
Horse: Wh-Pink!?
EM: ...which makes doing anything or going anywhere impossible,
or at least difficult and dangerous.
Horse: This guy is off his nut.
EM: My faith and belief in this is unshakeable.
Horse: Tshh...Yeah right!
EM: My faith is a great rock, against which the world could hurl whatever it would,
yet it would not be shaken.
Horse: You could use a good shake, buddy.

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Still keeping the moon.

Fleppo, id like to hear you act it. It all depends how it sounds.....

To be honest i liked you're original one, which i put it in the edited script that ive sent back to waux. When he adds the other scenes we need so we have a final draft, we can look at it again....

Oh yeah, the only part i edited was where you say buddy twice.

"You leave me out of this buddy" and "you need a good shake buddy"

I havent heard it acted but it strikes me that the repetition might not sound nice. I took it out of the first sentence. All my change edits on the script are in red, so everyone will be able to see them if they think i was wrong to edit.

I am recording a test of the latest version of it right now.


I just put the double "buddy" in there to sort of give the horse his own vocabulary. He just seems to me like the type of horse to say "buddy" a lot
But if anyone else agrees that repeating "buddy" is a bad idea, it should ofcourse not be in there. I wasn't too sure about it anyway.

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Still keeping the moon.

I personally liked the "buddying", so it's in my audition which I will be sending shortly. In a sudden moment of fever (I currently have a slight fever) I thought it might be fun to say "So what's new?" as opposed to "Yeah right...". Hope you don't mind...

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Well, I still have troubles with downloading the attachment. My computer can't cope with that TEXT/RICHTEXT or whatever file thingie. Could You please send it to me as a simple Word .doc file? Or copy it to the message itself.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Anyway, I still would like to hear the horse talking about buying a journal...

I like buddying, though.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

hmmmm, thats really annoying waux, especially since i had made it neat and that might be lost! I'll put it in notepad, simple .txt file.

I hope that's gonna be alright. Thouhg my computer is a pile of scrapheap peppered with some chips which it refuses to use.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Waux, can you meet me in chat?

No, not right now.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Well, the notes i put on the script are in Red, but in your simple .txt file they're obviously not. Take care to find the them!

Okay, I have read the re-written script. It's great! The edits and the additions are both neccessary and amusing, thought-provoking, fascinating etc...
Gunther Glick is the Vatican correspondent in Dan Brown's Angels and Demons.

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Sir Humphrey: With Trident we could obliterate the whole of Eastern Europe.
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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

So did you notice where you should write and insert the TWO scenes that need added?

Sorry, two scenes? I can only recall discussions about a Dirk-at-St Cedd's scene...

EDITO: Oh, silly me, that other monk-scene!

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

In the script, about 10-20 lines from the end, i wrote a comment about a scene that maybe should fit in. Its based on chapter 5 of the novel and we did discuss it a little bit, but didnt decide on it so i apologise.

Its the first scene of the next episode regardless.... Read my reasons for putting it in earlier and if you agree you can add it....

I just had a look at the .txt version of the script you have and i can imagine it would be hard to spot. My comments were in red italics in the .doc version

Its after Reg: a moment, i'll fetch mine

That's a good idea, because it would relieve the monotony of the dinner-scene.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Yeah, i thought that, and it goes back to the horse and monk which i think will be favourite characters after hearing Veet read fleppos' lines....

Oh, yes, they are gonna be absolute, all-time favs.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Okay, I'm done with the D-a-SC scene. It needs serious re-writing, 'coz it's a bit rushed. Now that cop has been replaced by Watkin. I suspect it's full of grammatical mistakes, James...

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

send it to me :)

Jameselaprendi@aol.com

Im only doing uni work so any excuse not to is good :)

Well, as far as I'm concerned I sent it to the Yahoo! address.

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Sir Humphrey: With Trident we could obliterate the whole of Eastern Europe.
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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Just as good.

i'll put it in the script and correct it if it needs it

Ggggreat!

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Nice scene. Im not going to fiddle with it too much but i have a feeling some other people will have some idea how to tweak some of the lines once we make the script available.

Okay.

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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

So how are we going to do this? Maybe what we should do is post the script on the email account or something, and then people post suggested alterations on to this thread to be taken into consideration by everybody and come up with a final script, then get people to start recording?

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Waux is writing the last scene and then I will put these 2 extra scenes in and I will do exactly that, put the script up on the email account.

We can get a final cast (i'll post a list of cast needed for this episode on the auditions thread in a minute actually) and then you guys can get some recording and mixing started. As you do that we can discuss scirpt alterations on this thread and production methods sounds, mixing... whatever on the other thread :)

Waux is writing the last scene and then I will put these 2 extra scenes in and I will do exactly that, put the script up on the email account.

We can get a final cast (i'll post a list of cast needed for this episode on the auditions thread in a minute actually) and then you guys can get some recording and mixing started. As you do that we can discuss scirpt alterations on this thread and production methods sounds, mixing... whatever on the other thread :)

If anyone needs the password for the Email account just PM me or waux or flepp or dip.

Great! This posted twice!

I suppose i can use this one to reply to the message below:
I am working on an essay for uni day and night at the moment and i have an eye on this forum as well so anytime your ready with the scene waux I will get it added to the script, tidyed up and onto the email account within an hour :)

By this time tomorrow, you will have been reading that missing scene. And the horse is gonna have lines as well.

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Sir Humphrey: With Trident we could obliterate the whole of Eastern Europe.
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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

I changed my mind. I sent the Monk-scene to the Yahoo! account.

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Sir Humphrey: With Trident we could obliterate the whole of Eastern Europe.
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You can't be a successful dictator and design women's underclothing. - Bertram Wooster, The Code of the Woosters

Changed your mind about adding horse lines and things?

Nevermind that. Im going to put the script together and post it onto the yahoo account within an hour, 90 mins at the most.

Script available on yahoo mail account.
Read my email to know what to do!

Love it!

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Dont know if you read the right one, i accidently sent it to another email address instead of sending it to ourselves, as it were. It was only available in the Sent Folder. I now put it in the inbox!

I apologise for the mix ups.

The script is now in the inbox of the yahoo account. It is flagged, and titled, EPISODE ONE SCRIPT. Click on the paper clip to download the attachment.

This is the edited, completed version.

This is an edited script for episode 1. The editor's comments and slight changes are in red.

In red and in brackets are editors comments about what definately needs looked at in terms of creative changes, but i usually havent created anything myself so let the discussion on the scripts thread commence! (I will be back in an hour if anyone needs me)